Author Topic: Born to be a Warrior [Fantasy Story]  (Read 4226 times)

Offline AbunaiKid

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Born to be a Warrior [Fantasy Story]
« on: January 16, 2013, 01:20:32 PM »
Born to be a Warrior











Written by: AbunaiKid [Jennifer]
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When she was abandoned by her father, she decided to choose a different path. She would never be a warrior, was said. A woman with a purpose, focused on one thing.
Exterminate the other warriors who killed her mother.  And she's determined, oh really she is.
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Who wants me to start with this story?

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Re: Born to be a Warrior [Fantasy Story]
« Reply #1 on: January 16, 2013, 01:56:08 PM »
An in-depth view of the universe would be great. Unless you plan yo reveal them slowly in the story?

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Re: Born to be a Warrior [Fantasy Story]
« Reply #2 on: January 16, 2013, 03:54:11 PM »
It's a bit medieval, but it can be modern at sometimes as well.
And it's a world full of fantasy. There are fantasy creatures as well, but i write in human form.

Prologue - Born to be a Warrior 000.

I knew what was happening, i just knew it. I had a strong relationship with my mother, and i felt her. It was similar to telepathy. I closed my eyes and tried to remember that day. That moment that they chased my mother till the big river. It hurt me, but i knew they would make an end to it all. I saw the knife on her throat. She was afraid, she knew it would be over. 'Do it, do it quickly,' she whispered, trembling. 'Only in this way i can find rest, sir.' She closed her eyes already. He cut her throat, blood flowed everywhere. He looked numb as she fell. 'Oh, my lord. Let this be a good choice. Now give me what you promised me...' He bent over her, put his finger on her forehead, and said the spell. When he was finished, he stood up and looked at the other men around him. 'We did it, we have it...'
Sighing, I opened my eyes. The tears rolled down my cheeks. 'You will be punished, one by one,' I whispered evil. I washed my face in the river, stood up and left the place.
« Last Edit: January 16, 2013, 04:30:12 PM by AbunaiKid » »

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Re: Born to be a Warrior [Fantasy Story]
« Reply #3 on: January 17, 2013, 06:47:58 PM »
You're good. There are some small grammar errors here & there, but I will enjoy reading this. ;)

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Re: Born to be a Warrior [Fantasy Story]
« Reply #4 on: January 17, 2013, 08:35:07 PM »
Well, i know but i am not good at english grammar so.........
But i hope despite that, you will enjoy the story!
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Re: Born to be a Warrior [Fantasy Story]
« Reply #5 on: January 17, 2013, 11:19:31 PM »
Well, i know but i am not good at english grammar so.........
But i hope despite that, you will enjoy the story!
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I love your writing style. I'm sure I will enjoy it.

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Re: Born to be a Warrior [Fantasy Story]
« Reply #6 on: January 17, 2013, 11:54:56 PM »
It's pretty good. Maybe with you+jones, we might actually have a rise in literary stuff here in Arpegi.